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[Meriaiza]

Originally Posted by Sarhad

Ab zindagi kisi maile kapde ki tarah to hoti nahin hai, ke bas doosra milte hi pehen liya aur sab theek ho gaya. zindagi to ek sangharsh hoti hai, jo jitni mehnat karta hai, utna hi aage jaate hai. Yeh baat Vikas ko badi jald hi pata chal gayi.

Saari umr wo apne kamre mein raha tha aur logon se kaise baat karte hain, usko koi idea nahin tha. Uska rehne-khaane ka dhang sheher ke logon se bilkul ajeeb tha. Uski boli ka bhi yahan sab mazaak banate thhe. Hua yeh ke dost banana to door, Vikas se koi baat karne tak ko raaji nahi tha. dheere dheere vikas wohi purani zindagi pe aa gaya - college gaye to theek nahin to pada rehta apne room mein.

Lekin ek din Vikas ne thaan hi liya ke wo apni is narak si zindagi ko behtar banayega. Usne padhai mein poori mehnat karna shuru kar diya. English Coaching classes bhi join kar li. Ab mehnat ka usspar dheere dheere asar hona shuru ho gaya. Uski english kaafi improve hui aur pass bhi achche numbaron se hone laga. Sab theek thaak chal hi raha tha ke ek bahut bada anarth ho gaya - Vikas babu ko pyaar ho gaya.

Ladki bhi aisi ke bas kayamat. Sar se paaon tak uska ek ek ang jaise bhagwaan ne bade soch samajh ke banaya tha. Upar se uski paidaish bhi ek ameer gharane mein hui. To woh vikas se baat karna to door, shayad kabhi uski taraf dekhi bhi nahin thhi. Par Vikas babu to din bhar ussi ke khayalon mein doobe rehte. Unko shayad apne zahan mein kahin maloom tha ke iss ladki ko paana unke liye naamumkin ke barabar hai, lekin wo to jaise mann-hi-mann usse apna maan hi chuke thhe.. Ab soch se to ladki patne waali hai nahin, to uska taanka kahin aur bhid gaye aur Vikas babu ban gaye jeete jaagte Devdas.

Jab bottal ka sahara le hi liya, to fir bas ussi mein doobta raha. Halat to yeh ho gayi thhi ke daru ke bina neend nahi aati aur roz subah wo hangover mein hi uthta. Kismat se uski naukari jald hi lag gayi thhi, to iss sharab ka asar usske immediate future pe nahin hua. lekin ab buri aadat to buri aadat hi hai.Kaam pe uska zyada mann lagta nahin jisse har roz usko boss ki daant khaani padti. daant khaa ke wo aur bhi dissappointed hota, aur bhi zyaada peeta. dheere dheere wo ek nihayti patthar dil insaan ho gaya jo sirf apne baaare mein hi sochta tha. Itni bhadaas uske dil mein bhar gayi thhi ke kabhi kabhi usko bhi darr lagta tha.

Sab kuch aise hi chal raha tha uss din tak. uss din ek ghatna hui jisne uski zindagi badal di. roz ki tarah hangover mein jhoomta hua uss din bhi wo office late pahuncha aur apni desk pe baith gaya. abhi soch hi raha tha ke kya kare ke uska colleague Vikram aa gaya uske paas.

"Vikas lo yeh mithai khao"
"kis khushi mein"
"mera bachcha hua hai"
"kitne bachche ho gaye tumhaare?"
"yeh teesra hai"
"tumhein sharam nahi aati?? apna nahin to kam se kam apni biwi ka to khayal karo. 15000 ki tankhwa mein kaise paalegi wo 3 bachchon ko? akkal lagao. koi competition chal raha hai kya?? apne pariwar ka nahin to desh ka socho. upar se itna karne ke baad mithai bhi baant rahe ho. Abe paise bacha, baad mein kaam aayenge. Mera waala laddu kisi aur ko khila diyo. Nikal ab"
"Ek baat poochun Vikas?"
"Pooch jaldi"
"ek haramzaade, kutte ki mentality rakhne waale, neech aadmi ke roop mein jeena kaisa lagta hai?" kehkar Vikram muda aur chal diya bina answer ki wait kiye. sach hi to keh raha tha wo. Vikas ki zindagi ab yehi ban ke reh gayi thhi.

Khair. Vikas pe to isko kuch asar pada nahin, usne jaise taise apna kam niptaya aur shaam ko fir pahunch gaya bar mein. Anhoni dekho - raste mein usse apni college ki dilruba bhi dikh gayi. Usko dekh kar Vikas ka mood aur kharab ho gaya. Uss din ussne kahin zyada daru pee li. Raat ko daru pee ke jab wo bar se nikla to usne paya ke usko sab dhundhla dikh raha hai. lekin kisi bhi baat ki fikar kiye begair wo chal pada apne raste. Uske beheke kadam pad kahin aur rahe thhe aur wo jaa kahin aur hi raha tha. Road cross karne laga to dekha ke ek truck aa raha hai. usse laga ke jald se bhaag ke uss taraf ho jayega par nashe mein dhutt wo kahan jaldi bhaag paya. Ek pal mein hi truck ki headlights ki roshni se wo chundhiya gaya aur fir achanak se hi ghana andhera chaa gaya. aankh khuli to paya ke stretcher pe hai aur kuch log badi habda dabdi mein usse kisi gaadi mein chadha rahe hain. usski aankhein fir bandh ho gayin.

"oh no, he is loosing heartbeat. nurse iski heart beat control karo jaldi." hospital mein doctor bola. fir andhera.
"Doctor mujhe nahin lagta ke isse bacha payenge. internal bleeding to tuk gayi hai par daru ka excess hone ke karan iski body naya blood reject kar rahi hai."
"tum try karte raho. just control the heartbeat sab theek ho jayega" doctor bola ke tabhi Vikas ki heartbeat 50 se 40 fir 25, 12 aur zero ho gayi

Yaara ek baat toh bata, yeah saala vikas college aur office done main jata tha? Kya mere pale baat nahi pari? Wese mast story hai aur yeah anti hero bhi buhat hi interesting character dala hai. Aage parhta hoon kahin mar ho toh nahi gaya.

[Meriaiza]

Originally Posted by Sarhad

"Abe tu batata hai ya doo kaan ke neeche. yeh kya mukti vukti laga rakha hai. mera bheja garam mat kar. Kya chahiye bata aur dafaa ho yahan se warna main police ko bula dunga. wo itna peetenge ke mukti to kya, uski 7 peediyon se door rahega tu" gusse mein tamtamaye vikas ne bola. Par uss vyakti par isski baat ka koi asar nahi ho raha tha. wo waise hi taktaki bandhe vikas ko ghoor raha tha. Achanak se hi usne apna haath Vikas ki ore badhaya.

"Vikas mere haath ko choo kar dekho."
"abe kya kar riya hai. main aisa aadmi nahi hoon"
"Vikas ek baar mera haath chuo aur fir main batata hoon ke main tumhaare peeche kyun pada hoon"
"abe kya chahta hai tu?? le laga diya" kehte hue vikas ne uske haath ko choone ki koshish kari lekin uska haath fir aar paar ho gaya.
"ab andar chalkar aaram se baith jao. jo main tumhein batane waala hoon, wo sunkar tumhein thoda jhatka lagega"
"abe bhaag tu yahan se. koi baat nahi sun-nu maine teri" kehte hue vikas apne flat mein ghus gaya aur zor se darwaaza band kar diya
"yeh band darwaze mujhe rok nahi sakte vikas. achcha hoga tum kahin baith jao" kehte hue wo "aadmi" band darwaaze ke aar paar hota hua vikas ke ghar mein ghus gaya

ab vikas ko pata lag gaya tha ke chahe kuch bhi ho, iss cheez se peecha chudaana namumkin hai, to woh ek chair pe baith gaya. "shuru karo apni bakwaas. main sun raha hoon"

"kya tum bhoot-pret pe vishwas rakhte ho vikas"
"nahin"
"to jo main bata raha hoon usko samajhne mein tumhein thodi mushkil aayegi. lekin dhyaan se sunna. Mrityu ke baad kya hota hai, yeh jaan-ne ki koshish bahut logon ne kari hai lekin asafal rahe hain. aaj main batata hoon tumhein ke asliyat kya hai. aadmi ko apne jeevan ke har ek karya ka marne ke baad. Jab saare punya-paap ka hisaab hota hai to decide hota hai ke aage uss aatma ke saath kya kiya jaye. 99% aatmayein ya to swarg jaati hai aur ya narak. reh jaati hai mere jaisi kuch abhaaga aatmayein jinko marne se pehle kuch bahut zaruri kaam karna tha par kar nahin paati. yeh kaam na ho paane se dharti par kaafi zindagiyan tabah ho sakti hain. isliye hum jaison ko waapas dharti par bheja jaata hai uss kaam ko poora karne ke liye"
"kya bakwaas hai. tumhaare kehne ka matlab hai ke tum ek aatma ho jo apna kuch kaam nikalwane waapas dharti par aayi ho"
"bilkul sahi. tum jaldi samajhte ho. aur yeh kaam nikalwaane mein sirf tum meri madat kar sakte ho"
"yeh kya kaam hai aur main hi kyun mila tumhein aisa bakwaas karya karne ke liye" vikas bola
"yeh sab main tumhein agle update mein batata hoon" yeh main bola

Saale toh mujhe choti updates ka kehta hai? Wese buhat interesting aur *cough* original story hai. Mera ek mashwara dehaan se sun. Gay porno dekhna chor de nahi toh kahin toh ne apni agli story ki inspiration wahaan se le li toh hum readers ka kya hoga? Aage parhta hoon.

[Meriaiza]

Originally Posted by Sarhad

"Mujhe mare 8 mahine ho chuke hain. meri aatma tab se bhatak rahi hai. Jab tumne mujhe dekha, main khush to bahut hua, lekin mujhe yeh yakeen nahi ho paya tha ke tum zinda ho ya nahi. Jab confirm hua, to main yahan chala aaya tumse milne"
"Par watchman tumhein kyun nahi dekh paa raha tha?"
"main ek aatma hoon. koi sadak pe pada kachre ka dibba nahin ke har koi mujhe dekh le. ek aatma ko sirf ek hi zinda aadmi dekh sakta hai. aur wo hi uski mukti ka eklauta saadhan hota hai"
"karna kya hoga mujhe?"
"Apne chhote se jeevan mein main ek bahut hi khulla vyakti raha hoon. poora waqt aish aur aaram ki zindagi jeeya hoon. ladkiyon ko to jaise main kapdon ki tarah badla hai. mere ghar waalon ne meri ladkibaazi dekhte hue meri shaadi jaldi karwa di thhi. meri biwi bahut hi sundar aur pativrata thhi, mujhse bahut pyaar karti thhi. lekin maine kabhi uski value na jaani. marne se pehle 6 mahinon se mera affair chal raha tha. ek din tang aake maine thaana ke main yeh sab chhod dunga aur poori tarah se apni biwi ka ho jaunga. uss din maine break off kiya, kuch phool khareede aur apne ghar jaa raha tha apni biwi se maafi maangne. main tahe dil se chahta tha ke sab kuch usse bata doon aur wo mujhe maaf kar de aur hum achchi zindagi jiyein. Par honi ko kuch aur hi manzoor tha. Uss din meri car ka bhayankar accident ho gaya aur ghar pahunchne ki bajaye, mera upar ka ticket kat gaya. bas ab mujhe apni wife tak yeh baat pahunchani hai ke main usko bahut pyaar karta hoon aur wo mujhe maaf kar de"
"abbey dhatt.. itni si baat. wo to main aise hi phone kar ke usse bol dunga. khel khatam. fir tu upar jaiyo, main apni zindagi mein mast"
"aur tujhe kya lagta hai ke ek anjaan vyakti ke kehne pe wo mujhe aise hi maaf kar degi?"
"arrey kuch bhi bol dunga. kahunga main bhoot dekh sakta hoon, aapke pati ko dekha hai, wo yeh keh raha hai"
"abbey yeh koi chocolate nahin hai jo tu usse cheen lega aur mujhe mukti mil jayegi. jab tak uske dil se mujhe shama nahi milegi, main yahin rahunga"
"to tu sadd yahan. main kuch nahin kar sakta tera"
"kyun nahi kar sakta. sab kuch mumkin hai. tumhein bas usse dosti badhani hogi, jaise hi usse tumpe yakeen ho jaye, tum yeh baat samjha dena"
"dekh main tujhe seedhi baat batata hoon. 2 karan hain main kyun nahi kar sakta. pehla yeh ke ladki se baat karna to door, mujhse to unke paas bhi nahi jaaya jaata. Usse dosti karna to door, mujhse usko ek shabd bhi nahi bola jayega"
"aur doosra.."
"doosra hai ke i dont care. mujhe koi farak nahi padta ke tum upar jao ya neeche raho. bas mera peecha chhod do. pakk gaya hoon tumhaara gyaan le le ke. thoda rest karne do" kehkar Vikas bistar par let gaya aur uss "aadmi" ki taraf peeth kar ke sone ki koshish karne laga. ab thaka to hua hi tha, jaldi hi kharaate bharne laga. 2 ghante baad neend khuli to usse thoda achcha mehsoos hone laga. "Shayad koi bura sapna dekha tha maine. Bhoot, aakhri ichcha hey bhagwaan. kya kya sapne dikhayega aur" sochkar wo bistar se utra aur kitchen mein chala gaya. wahan fridge se thada paani nikala aur peeya. Bhookh bhi lag rahi thi to usne socha aaj bahar hi jaa kar khaana khaya jaye. jab paani pee ke waapas hall mein aaya to dekha wohi aadmi kaale suit mein baitha hai uski chair par.

"arrey tu abhi tak yahin hai"
"to kya socha tumne"
"kis baare mein?"
"mere baare mein.. mere kaam ke baare mein??"
"abe shareer ke saath saath dimag bhi tyaag diya tha kya.. ek baar bola hai na ke nahin to matlab nahin. hat side mein ab mujhe khaane ke liye jaana hai" kehte hue vikas ne ghar ki chaabi uthayi aur ghar lock karke lift ka intezaar karne laga. Lift aayi to uske saath saath "woh" bhi chhad gaya. jab lift 4th floor pe ruki to watchman andar chadha haafta hua.

"ab tujhe kya hua" vikas bola
"kuch nahin sahab. wo nayi malkin aayi hai neeche ke flat mein. unka saaman upar karwa raha tha"
"neeche bhi kisi ko rakh lo, nahin to hum sab ka saman neeche ho jayega. tumhaari to naukari hi jayegi, humaari zindagi ki mehnat barbad ho jayegi"
"kya mazaak karte hain sahab, neeche hain na 2 aur ladke"
"ab yeh lift ka darwaaza band karega?? baraat ghusaani hai aur??"
"wo memsahab aa rahi hain sahab"
"arrey bhaad mein gayi teri memsahab. mujhe late ho raha hai" kehte hue vikas jaldi jaldi close button dabane laga watchman ko side mein karke.
lift band hoti dekh bahar se ek ladki ki awaaz aayi, "arrey ruko main bhi hoon" jisko sunkar vikas ke haath aur tezi se close button dabane lage.
"Arrey ruk jaa ek second wo...." aatma boli
"abey tu chup kar. khada reh wahan ya kood ja bahar" vikas bola
"sahab main to chup hi hoon" watchman seham kar bola. usko subah waala kissa yaad thha.
"tujhse baat nahi kari. tu chup reh" vikas ka dimag bahut garam ho raha tha ab

Lift ruki aur vikas jhaat se bahar ho gaya. lekin akela to woh rehne waala tha nahin. Uske saath uski poonch bhi chal rahi thhi. thodi door chalke vikas poori tarah se khij gaya.
"yaar tumhaara naam kya hai? i mean tumhaara naam kya tha?"
"Prem" aatma boli
"arrey waah. itna naya aur anokha naam. to suno prem bhai. tumhein maine clearly bata diya hai ke main tumhaari madat nahi kar raha. fir tum kyun mere peeche pade hue ho?"
"mujhe pata chal gaya ke mere liye tumhein hi kyun chuna gaya hai"
"To bakoge ya uske liye bhi kisi saadhu se japp karwa ke muhurat nikalunga tab tumhaara muh khulega"
"Kyunki tumhaari nayi padosi meri patni hai" hi keh saka prem.

Tera sense of humor aur gayness kahani se tapak tapak kar bahir aa rahi hai. Buhat hi badhiya update aur ab tak kahani ko buhat lightly aur interesting way main likha hai.

[Meriaiza]

7 updates path li hain. Buhat interesting story hai. Aage dekhta hoon ke kya hota hai? Toh tu pora writer ban gaya re.

[Sarhad]

Originally Posted by Meriaiza

Yaara ek baat toh bata, yeah saala vikas college aur office done main jata tha? Kya mere pale baat nahi pari? Wese mast story hai aur yeah anti hero bhi buhat hi interesting character dala hai. Aage parhta hoon kahin mar ho toh nahi gaya.

abe zindagi bhar college mein thode padta rahega.. college khatam hua, office shuru ho gaya

Originally Posted by Meriaiza

Saale toh mujhe choti updates ka kehta hai? Wese buhat interesting aur *cough* original story hai. Mera ek mashwara dehaan se sun. Gay porno dekhna chor de nahi toh kahin toh ne apni agli story ki inspiration wahaan se le li toh hum readers ka kya hoga? Aage parhta hoon.

tu to khush ho jayega gay story aa gayi to

Originally Posted by Meriaiza

Tera sense of humor aur gayness kahani se tapak tapak kar bahir aa rahi hai. Buhat hi badhiya update aur ab tak kahani ko buhat lightly aur interesting way main likha hai.

apna gay chashma utaar aur dekh ke yeh kahani mein kuch bhi gay nahi hai

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Originally Posted by Meriaiza

7 updates path li hain. Buhat interesting story hai. Aage dekhta hoon ke kya hota hai? Toh tu pora writer ban gaya re.

[naughty.boy]

Nice story.lekin ye prem kaha chala gaya last mein.
KUCH BHI HO STORY BARIYA LIKHTE HO YAAR.
Iska 2nd part bhi likho bhai pls.aur iss nisha(naam theek se yaad nahi.story 5/6 din pehle pari thi)ko zaroor pakarwana.

[Sarhad]

2nd part bhi likhunga jald hi