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 Announcement For those who don't have access to Word Count Software on their PC/Mobile Phones. Online Word Count Website Please use the above website to count the words in your stories so that they don't break the Word Limit of 700-3500 Words. Last edited by xyster : 3rd August 2012 at 01:51 PM. |
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1st August 2012
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Exbii's Ultimate Story Contest Rules and Regulations  Before you proceed writing your story, we request you to go through the rules and regulations assigned for this contest.1. Stories in Hindi, English and Hinglish are all allowed but only in English font.  2. Only 1 story per participant is allowed. If anyone is found using alias or posting multiple stories, that member along with his/her alias will be disqualified from the contest.  3. The word limit for writing a story is 700-3500 words. The story should not have less than 700 words or more than 3500 words. To count the words of your story, use this tool.  4. Any story which is edited after posting will be disqualified.  5. The is an open theme story contest. You can write on any theme you want to and both sexual and non sexual stories are allowed.  6. Any story having any underage character (below 18 years of age) will not be accepted. Additionally, the stories should follow story section rules and should not break them.  7. Any story which is copied or has already been posted anywhere including exbii will not be considered.  8. Stories will only be posted in Contest Thread. Any story posted anywhere else will not be eligible for judging.  9. Story needs to be posted in one single post. Posting of Story in multiple posts/parts is not allowed.  10. Please don't chit-chat or spam in Contest Thread. Contest Thread is only for story posting. For any query please go to this thread and for discussions, please go to the discussion thread. 11. Everyone is welcome to participate in the Contest. The last date for submitting a story is 31st August 2012, 9 PM IST.  Judging (1)A panel of judges from the admin team will judge this contest. Their decision will be final.  (2)Stories will be judged on 2 categories and they are originality and quality. 
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1st August 2012
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Disqualified Stories (1)Amar Prem of Prachi and Salman by Dirtymind365 (500 points to bestforu83 for reporting) (2)Shoot me by TheArtist_Stories (500 points to rohitalu for reporting) (3)1st love by timmycool46 (500 points to bestforu83 for reporting) (4)Locked up and Fucked up! by eacizcge (500 points to rohitalu for reporting) (5)Prayer of sex(incest) by sweta600 (For posting the story in multiple posts and exceeding the upper cap) (6)Sasur or Bahu by hitz_talk (500 points to bestforu83 for reporting) (7)Untitled by sa23rsfsdf (500 points to bestforu83 for reporting) (8)Family Party At Friend's House by bpal1000 (500 points to bestforu83 for reporting) (9)Sex With Sister by kinchu (500 points to DragonWarrior007 for reporting) (10)A Sister's Helping Hand by KINGPHANTOM (For posting in multiple posts and exceeding words limit) Last edited by Meriaiza : 30th August 2012 at 04:13 PM. |
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2nd August 2012
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Please don't chit-chat or spam in Contest Thread. Contest Thread is only for story posting. All other posts will be removed. For queries please use this thread and for discussions, please go to the discussion thread. Last edited by xyster : 3rd August 2012 at 07:30 PM. |
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3rd August 2012
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"sahab ap har ramjan eid ke din yuh masjid ke samane kyu khade reh jate he??? Apto hindu ho na?" Ek bar fir mere dil ke dhadkane tez hoti gayi eid ke rat us tilmilati roshni aur sath me charo or sirf aman ki bat chand bhi jese dhartimata ke sir ka taj banke asman pe apna samrajya badha chuka tha..Par mere driver Ramlal ke us ek labs se ab ye sab fika lagne laga jese gutan hone lagi...Mera sir dard se fata ja raha tha.. "muje maf karna sahab mujse koi galti hue??" mene uske kandheka sahara lia muje bahat hassi ane lagi me chila ke bola" teri koi galti nahi he dost...Galti to us duniya walo ki he jinhone hum insano ko lakiro me bat dia...Banane walene koi fark nahi rakha to hum konlog he jo hindu mushlim,sikh ke nam se logo ko bulae.? Ramalal tum jante ho to fir kyu mere samane ye hindu mushlim ki bat late ho?? Mandir me rab aur masjid me ram ko dekh lia karo chalo baris honewali he chalo jaldi.." aur hamari Car mere ghar ki aur chalpadi.. Aj meri jindagi bich samoodar pe fasi nav ke tarah he na koi nanjeel na koi sahara, Wo doar kafi pichhe chhut gaya jab hamare nam ke sikke chhapate the wo doar hi esa tha waqt bhi mera tha, rosan sabera tha .... Tabhi jordar barish sooru hue aur ek bar fir apne vastavik jiwan me wapas agaya ,,,wo kehte hena ki "barish ane se dilo me badh ani suru ho jati he mere dil me bhi hulchul suru ho gayi... pata nahi kab ahiste ahiste me apne un dino me pahoch gaya tab charo or mere bap ki jay jaykar thi aur me gav ka honewala rajkumar" ---------**-------- shoryagadh mera gav chhota gav par shahar ki tarah facilities se bhara hua. 1947 me desh to azad ho gaya par gaav pe hamara raj tha...Kyu ki Mera bap Rana VEERPRATAP SINH gav ka sarpanch,chacha Gajaraj Sinh jileka pramukh aur jat ka mukhiya. Aur Me Rana Rajveersinh Me mere ma,bap aur chacha chachi aur unka ladka hum 6 log tab ek mahal jese ghar pe rehte the...Baap ne bachpan se sikhaya tha Raj kese karna? Din ki sooruat se lekd rat ko sone tak bas charo or politics politics aur bas politics... Pura gav mahabharat ke Ran medan ki tarah tha me Hindu tu musalman kat dalo mar dalo ..Kitne dange fasat hote the waha aur me bhi enme haste haste apna munafa dekhta....Kisi chiz ki kami nahi thi muje siway insaniyat Aur undino election ki date sir pe a khadi thi Aur ab gaav me ek aur sar upar uth raha tha " Jabir khan" yu to gaav me hindu aur mushalman ki abadi saman thi par par bap ke Dadagiri se tang ake Kuchh logo ne party change kar li, ab election bhi sir pe tha aur agar hum hath pe hath dhare bethe rahe to "Jabir khan" jit jaega... Aur esi lie mere bap ne muje apne kamare me bulaya aur kaha-ja beta aj dikhane ka time aya he ki tu mera khoon he...Bas thoda dil se bhi sochlena jab dimag jyada garam ho jae.." bas aur kya? Bap ke charanraj ko sir pe chadhae me nikal pada apne 4 dosto ke leke..... Hum ne ek plan banaya aur wo success bhi hua jisko akhabar me padh ke mere bap ne muje sine se laga lia..."Mere samane aj Shoryagadh ka Chirag chamak raha he bahat achha socha wese bhi wo jamine koi fasal wagera to ugati nahi thi achha kia jaladia,, hamare 30 bighe jalae aur ghav valo ke 25 bighe to fir ungli to jabir khan pe hi uthegi na???" aur fridge se 1 high class daru ki bottle mere hatho me thamate bole-bank se 2 lakh leke jiske khet jale he unhe tasali deke baat de..." mene esa hi kia har roj me apne dosto ke sath nikal padta aur gav walo pe roaf jama ne laga..Jese ki gaav ka agala raja me hu.. Par meri har ek ginti galat hue kyu ki us din baris hi itni tez hue thi ki puchho mat..... Pure Gav me bijali chali gayi thi... Me apne 3 maleke makan kam mahal me 3ri manjil pe so raha tha...Tabhi mene kuchh chikhe suni jo hamare mahal ke pichhe se gujarati sadak se arahi thi... Me bina kisiko batae barish me bhigta hua awaj ki disa me bhagne laga to dekha ki waha pe ek auto juka hua tha mamo abhi wo sadak se fisal niche girne wala ho ...Aur pas me kuchh aurate jese apne bal bute pe pure auto ko utharakha ho wese apne najook hathose auto ko khich rahi thi.... Me aur tez bhaga par jab karib gaya to mere per do kadam pichhe ho gaye mere shaitani dimag ne kaha-"ye to Jabir khan aur uski family he...! Bah jane do muje kya? Par tabhi mere kano pe ek aurat ki dardnak chikh suni..."aaaaaiiiissss......."wo chikh ko sun jese mere dil me jal jala utha me wapas muda aur bhagte hue unke pas gaya to dekha-mitti fisal ne ki wajah se auto ka pichhla tyre khisak gaya aur ab kuchh hi pal me auto us gaddhe me jane wali he..Jise bachane me 1 admi aur 2 aurat lage hue the aur ek aurat apne pet ko dabate hue roe ja rahi thi....Mene bhi apni majabut baho se sahara dia aur jor se dhaka lagane laga.. Charo or andhere ne apna samrajya sthapit kia hua tha par unki najar jese mujpe padi mano unke chehre pe ek ajib si chamak agayi aur thodi mehnat ke bad wo auto sahi salamat sadak pe agaya... Mene dekhato wo 2no aurate aur jabir khan apne per pe hath rakh ke hamfne lage me abhi bhi bewakuf ki tarah khada tha... Ek sath tino ne kaha-sukriya Aur wo lambi dadi wale jabir ne auto ka stering hath me lia , usike sath wo aurat jo sayad unki patni thi wo unke pas age beth gayi aur dusri aurat jo kam umra ki thi wo uski beti hogi jo pichhe beth gayi auto start hue aur chalne lagi me abhi bhi us auto ki taraf dekh raha tha muje laga koi saya muje juk juk ke dekh raha he... Tabhi asman pe ek jor dar cham chamati bijali hue jisne ek pal ke lie apni tez roshni faila ke andhere ko mita dia aur us roshni me muje us saye ki surat dikh gayi....Mera hath apne ap hi mere balo ko janjod ne laga... Esa khubsurat chehra mene aj tak kisika nahi dekha tha gahri kali ankhe, aur utnahi gora chehra sharam aur haya me thode fule hue gal aur sukriya kehne ardh khule hoth... Hamari najar ek dusre se takarai aur achanak wo andar auto me gus gayi ..Muje yakin nahi araha tha ki ek pal me mene kitna dekh lia usko...... Me kuchh pal pagalo ki tarah waha khada raha fir bhagte hue wapas ghar ake so gaya... Par nind to koso dur thi meri ankho se....Wo tilmilata chehra, cham chamati ankhe jese khud bhagwan ne wo bijali hum dono ke milan ke lie bheji thi.....Kab muje neend a gayi pata na chala par dusre din mene apni bike ko aspatal ki aur bhaga dia.. Muje pura yakin tha wo yahi pe milegi... Us husn ki pari ki talash me yaha waha me bhatak raha tha, thak gaya par wo na mili me har ke beth gaya waha ek bench par.. Muje pata nahi kyu? chen nashib nahi ho raha tha? Dil jese uchhal uchhal ke kehrha tha"ek bar didar karwado us najuk kali, husnki pari se" esi halchal to kabhi nahi hue thi are yar ye kya chiz thi ...? Achanak mere per apne ap chalne lage aur me jake hospital mehi bane ek chhote mandir ke samane jake khada ho gaya aur ankhe bandh kar ke bas us chehre ko soch ne laga,aj pehli bar me mandir pe aya tha ya yu kaha ja sakta he ki bachpan se gita,mahabharat ke jaga rajnitishastra ke padh padhaya gaya tha,. Muje jese nind agayi aur sapne me wo ladki jo mera chen le gayi he wo ake boli" salam walekum.." nahi nahi ye sapana nahi tha....Aur mene jese hi ankhe kholi to wo pari mere samne thi.... Me bas uske masoom,gore chehreko dekhta raha muje esa laga jese ye abhi abhi mere lie jannat se utari he sirf mere lie.. Wo mere pas se gujarati hue mere age jake mandir ke darwaje ke pas pero ko mode beth gayi.. Me bas dekhta raha...Usne apne hathoko ibadat ke lie apne chehre ke samne laya aur kuchh urdu me mantra bolne lagi.. Meri ankhe bina palake jukae wo najara dekh rahi thi.. Pehli bar dil pe ek quistion utha "me hindu??? To bhagvan kiske? Ye to masjid me jani chahiye... Yaha kyu ayi? " dekhte hi dekhte apne sir ko jami pe jukake apne dono hatho ko ek ek karke kano ke pas lejake fir kuchh boli..Aur khadi hoke mere pas ayi mera har rom rom khada hogaya kyu ki wo mere age ake boli-apto mashiha ho....Khuda ne apne nek farishte ko hamare lie bheja to ab us rab ki ibadat to karni banti he ..Aur masjid to hospital me he nahi fir socha mandir me hi ajati hu...Bhagvan meri awaj khuda tak pohacha dege..." aur wo ek mahkti khushbuko apne julfo me samae apne dupate ko apne hatho me leke chalpadi bahar ki aur..."me dekhta rah gaya bas dekhta raha..Mene bhagvan ki murti ki aur bhigi nigahose dekha aur apne ap mere dil se awaj nikali-yaha peli bar ayahu tumne itna bada toafa de dia, har roj auga tere kadmo pe jindagi gujaruga ek bar us pari ko mera banade....." ***- "ye kehte hue tu mar kyu na gaya?? rajput hoke esi bat???" chanta galpe laga par dil ro pada"kya galat kaha?" "wo aspatal tere dada ne banwaya aur waha masjid banwaega?? Mar kyu nahi gaya ye bolne se pehle??" mere lie aj pehli bar kisi aur ke lie mohabat aur bap ke lie nafrat peda hue..." par mere dil me abhi bhi ek sawal tha jiska hal dhundane me chal pada "Jumma chok" kyu ki wo musalamano ka ilaka tha aur me masjid me jake dekhna chahta tha akhir kya nayi chiz he waha?? Me apne bike ko jumma chok ki aur bhagata hua masjid ke samane pahoch gaya... Mene apne bike ko side pe roka aur masjid ke darwaje ki aur chalne laga.."Rajveer rana...????" ek pahadi gunj aur sir pe ek bada fatka ankho ke samane andhera hone laga..Aur ek aur fatke ne mere bache hosh bhi chin lie.. Wo ilaka pura shor sarabe aur tarah tarah ki dukano se bhara hua tha.. Ankhe bandh ho gayi thi par kan pe ek awaj takrai-kyu mar rahe ho bichare ko? Wo jabir khan ki awaj thi Aur usko na jane kitne logo ne ek sath dant te hue kaha-Veerpratap ka beta he kat dalo.... .......***......, Mere sir pe ek kafi komal hath fir raha tha aur meri ankhe dhire dhire khul rahi thi pura badan tut gaya tha par sukra he me bach gaya sayad jabir khan ne muje bachalia warna ajto mere bap ke bure karmo ka fal muje bhugatna padta.. Mene charo or dekhato kafi saf kamra aur bicho bich alisan bed pe me leta hua tha. Aur ek mere ammi ki umra ke aurat mere mathe ko sahala rahi thi.. Me ahiste se utha aur unka sukriya kia.. Unhone kaha-beta jo hua wo mue nat jat ke lie ladte bhediyo ki wajah se hua.Tum apne abuko kahoge to fir se kohram mach jaega." mene unka hath apne hath me lia aur kaha-Me esa nahi hone duga! Tabhi rim jim payal ki ahate aur kangano ki awaj ke sath wo husn ki malika room me ati he..Jisko dekh mera muh khula ka khula reh gaya kale pahanawe me uski white body saf saf bata rahi thi ki wo hi husn ki malika he.. Wo ake mere pas beth gayi bina kuchh bole hum ek dusre ke ankho me ankhe dale ji bhar ke ek dusre ko dekhne lage "ye he meri beti "ALIyAH" Mere dil me najane kitni bar ye awaj ek diwal se dusri aur dusri se teesri dawalo takarake bar bar Aliyah Aliyah dohrane lagi..... Wo apne palke jukaye apni ammi ke kandhe pe hath rakh ke bethi thi..Sharmo haya ki saksat murat thi wo agar meri jagah koi silpkar hota yaha to wo aliyah ki hubahu sone ki murat banadeta..Jese uska har ek ang apne alag lehje me tha...Aur ek bar fir hamari ankhe mil gayi thodi der ese hi gurti rahi fir ek ajib si muskan ke sath bhag gayi room se bahar me bhi khada hua aur Aliyah ki ammise bola "me chalta hu..Ap sab ka bahat sukriya jabir bhai ko kehna sukriya meri or se" Apne bike ko us sum sam sadak pe bhaga dia... Sarir pe gav the jo gehre to the par mere dil ki hasarato ne unhe kam kar dia tha.. Mene ek sahi jagah dekhi aur chalti bike se kud pada.. Thodi kharoch ayi aur bike fisalti hue dur tak jake ek ped se takrai aur puri bike tabah ho gayi.. Thodi der ke bad ghar jake mere bap ko accident ki juthi kahani suna di... Aur jake let gaya apne kamare me "me karwat pe karwat badalta raha par wo chehra mere ankho se hat ta nahi tha.. Wo mandir me alah ko dekhti he aur aj tak me.....??" muje apni biti jindagi pe gin ane lagi... 2 din aram karne ke bad ek bar fir dil bekabu ho gaya aur mere kadam apne ap chalpade jabir khan ke ghar ki aur es bar me jab sadak se gujara to sab muje gur rahe the par kisine kuchh kia nahi mene jabir khan ke ghar ka darwaja khat khataya.. Kuchh der bad darwaja khula to wo aliyah thi.. Usne muje andar bulaya aur usi surili awaj me kaha-sab shahar gaye he ap bethiye adhe gante me ajaege.. Me to jese uske samane kathputli ho jata tha-me chup chap jake beth gaya wo andar jake chay bana ke lai aur muje dete hue boli-ap bahat padhe likhe dikh rahe ho kitni digree li he. Mene chay ki ek chuski lete hue kaha-ab bolo wo digree ka certificate kal mangwalu .... Aur me has pada wo meri aur dekhti rahi ..Muje laga wo janti hogi mere bap ke bare me to mene puchha-kyu ese dekh rahi ho? Usne gur te hue kaha-lagte to sarif ho... Me uske kehne ka matlab samaj gaya mene socha yahi achha moka he aur me bola-ha wo kya he na apko dekhne ke bap apka role play karte karte thoda sarif lag raha hu.. Fir mene apne ankho ke bhramar khich ke thoda danger type face banaya ..Ye dekhke wo has padi aur boli-bahat sarif ho.. Me-ha woto apki meharbani he wese apko kabhi dekha nahi gav me uska chehra kuchh der ke lie fika pad gaya-nana nani ke yaha pali hu bachpan se ab wo nahi rahe,.. Fir chehre pe muskan lake kaha- muje nafrat he mere abu se kyu ki wo bahat gatiya gatiya kam karte he.. Me samaj gaya uski dasa bhi mere jesi he.. Tabhi darwaja khula aur aliyah ke ammi abu agaye.. Muje dekhke ake jabir bhai mere gale lage-ap bahat samajdar ho rajveer aie khana khate he... Aur me unlogo ke har ek khusi me sath rehne laga unke ghar weak me 1 bar to dawat pe jata aur ab me unke ghar ke sabhi se gur mil gaya tha.. Kai bar bap ne data par ab muje unse koi lagav nahi tha..Bas meto ek hi chiz ko samajta"Aliyah" **) Aj faisla karlia tha mene aliyah ko dil ki bat bata dunga use apne dil ki chahat dikha duga.. Aur me chalpada aliyah ke ghar ki aur jese mene socha tha wo akeli thi.. Aj wo hare jode me basanti belo ki tarah khili khili lag rahi thi..Mene darwaje pe hi uske najuk kalai ko hath me tham lia aur juk ke mere dil me uske lie panapti har ek bat bolne laga-tum ne muje insan banaya he aur muje khud ke dil se milaya he to aj us dil ke lie me tumhara dil mag raha hu bolo soda-e-dil ke karar pe dastakhat karogi ya???" mere bat adhi hi rahi aur Aliyah mere sine se sat gayi.. Mere khushi ka koi thikana na raha.... Me ne kas ke usko apni baho me samalia... Par tabhi Meri najar sidiyo pe khade Jabir khan pe padi...Jinki ankhe ag ka gola ho gayi thi Muje laga wo asani se man jaege es lie mene Aliyah ke hath ko thame jabir khan ke aur badha unse unki betika hath mangne wo adhi sidiyo pe khada tha.. Hum sidiya chadhte gaye mere dil me aj khusiyo ka jaljala utha tha kyu ke mere khwabn ki malika aj mere hath ko thame mere pas thi.. Hum dono ne juk ke jabirkhan ke charan spars kie par tabhi achanak jabir ne apne per ko uthake Aliyah pe lat mar di wo chikhti hue sidiyo se giri gayi uske mathe se khoon bahane laga tha mene doad ke usko meri baho me uthalia.. Me-ye kya kia apne?Kyu kia? Jabir ne mera hath pakada aur muje dhake deke ghar se bahar nikalte hue bola-kabstan pe bida karuga beti ko par hindu se na bihauga ....Chaleja tere ek upkar ka badla he tu jinda ja raha he ainda aega to mara jaega..." ek bar fir hindu-musalmam ke nam se do premi bichhad gaye..Mene na jane kitne din bina khaye bitaye kitni rat jag jag ke bitayi, woh ramjan mah chal raha tha aur mene bhi apni mehbuba ko pane ke lie pura mah bhukha raha tha par aj Eid ki rat thi hamare yaha to sadharan din tha par kuchh duri pe patako ka shor sunai de raha tha ab aj ki rat me usko mile bina nahi reh sakta..Me gav ke dur kheto ki aur chal pada aur Aliyah ke ghar ke pichhwade se ghar ki border pe enter hua... Ghar ke age pura mahol rat me bhi din ki tarah jama tha..Par mene dekha to dusri manjil pe sirf ek esa kamra tha jaha ki light jali hue nahi thi.. Me samaj gaya ye meri aliyah thi jo khudko mere bager tanha pa rahi hogi..Me pipe se hota hua jese tese khidaki se andar kud pada to waha pe wo pith ke bal leti hue thi.........Mene usko hila ke jagane ki kosis ki par nakam raha..Muje laga sayad wo ruthi hue he to mene usko pakadke sidha kia .... Par jo najara me dekh raha tha wo dekhke me hadbada gaya waha pe khun se latpat aliyah nirjiv hoke leti thi..Uske pet me khanjar gusa tha mene ahiste se us khanjar ko nikala fir usko sine se sata ke hilane laga"jag jao aliyah jag jao please jag jao,.." tabhi kamare ki light on hoti he...Aur 10se bhi jyada police meri or pistol tane khade reh jate he -u r under arrest.. Ji chahta tha khanjar se apni jan bhi le lu par ek bar fir wo sharmo haya se latpat chehra mere ankho ke samane agaya...Aur me age kuchh soch na paya..Ankhe halke se bandh hone aur behosh hoke uski lash pe gir pada......... dusre din ka akhabar->Veerpratapsinh ka beta katil... Mahine bad ->election me Veer pratap ki har aur Jabir khan ki jeet **- bap ne to 4 din me chhuda dia jail se par mera dil mere aliyah ke bina waha nahi lag raha tha.. Mene apne ghar pe chori ki 1 cror rupie uthaye aur ratorat waha se bhag nikla..." aj me Bahat khush hu esa kah sakta hu kyu ki aj me desh ke ek badi city me anathalay chala raha hu...Jaha kisiko apne bap ke bare me nahi pata to wo jat ke bare me kya sochege?? Apne apko nayi pehchan deke khush hu.."Ranjan manhi na aj ek bar fir khatam hua najane kitno ko nayi rah mili...Me ne apne Ashram me school se leke aspatal banawaya " aur ha akhri bat yaha pe ek hi mandir he jaha pe puja hoti he sachai ki..." Ramlal-sahab diki me rakhi chize bat ni heto me gadi andar le leta hu..." me-ok aur me gadi se bahar a gaya abhi bhi baris tez thi ... Aur me bhigta hua apni aliyah ko yad karne laga.. "badan ka to ek bahana he, baris se to dil ko bhigana he.." aj bhi gav vesa hi he par mera pyar aj bhi amar he [/size] |
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