[k2soni]

Review for Kahi- Ankahi

A Very Good first attempt. College life depicted excellently. Good flow and equally
good narration make it a good read. It appeared a real life story rather than any
fickle of imagination. Once again the word limit took its toll and the end appeared
to be a little abrupt.

Overall a very good story and to my mind a contender for one of the top slots.

All the best bro.

[rehankhan143]

samne vali khidki :-

well mujhe ye story kafi acchi lagi ... duggel ji ki entry achi thi .... nashe me duth aadmi ka mariyal front office receptionist ke sath vartalap kafi comedy tha..... ek tharki aadmi ki tharak dikhayi di jab usne ek couple ko kiss karte dekha ..... fir murder hote dekhne pe uska ek or roop samne aaya jo usko dayavaan bna rha tha ... lekin agle hi pal jab khidki gauyab hui to hame lga ye sala pakka bevda hai ..... jo chutiya bna rha hai ...... isko pine ke baad aise hi kuch dikhta hoga .... lekin jab dobara se vahi dikha or lash ko bore me daalte hue usne dekha to story me kfi suspense aa chuka tha ...... or fir subah antiques ki chori.... or achanak story ka nayak badal ke ek naya hero aa jata hai story me jo us mistry ko solve karta hai.....

vause mujhe sb kuch acha lga ,.. perfect narration , language ....... suspense jo story ko bore na hone de ..... or ek aise script jisko padh ke maja aaya ...... story me or kya chhiye ......

samne vali khidki ek majedaar suspense story hi ..... for the writer....

9/10

[Drift_King21]

Review : Ek Jam Aur Sahi

Again skipped few stories to write the review of this story as it was posted by Meri Bro, no introduction required i guess, the name speaks for itself. Well where to start where to end. The first time in this competition i feel like why the hell the words limit were not used properly . A story of 2500 odd words which give it 1000 more words to explain it delightfully and yet the story started in the 5th gear and ended God knows in which gear

Well to be honest the main hero of this kind of story is no other than emotions and this story had none of it, the man becoming a drug addict just because he lost his sweet heart is very hard to absorb but still lets not put too much emphasis on that as it could have been a writing liberty but from then on till the man went into the rehabilitation center it was too quick for my liking but still it was written and explain well enough. Now the real problem starts first of all these things a hell of more time than 3 months and then in one line the men enters the rehabilitation center and comes out of it just perfect . I know these things as one of my real life friend went through all this and i can easily say that the amount of damage drugs does to the mind of the person is beyond our imagination.

Second thing is that the most important phase was this when the man protagonist went to rehabilitation center, the use of 1000 words should have been there explaining the trauma he went through and then getting ashamed of what he did in his life, just going and coming out was a big let down from writing point of view. The last part was very well written the conversation between father and son and the decision son made completely justified but i didn't feel one bit through out the story for Jatin, it was like just reading, i felt no emotions for him even in the last paragraph as well though i feel for his son and thats where i think the story went wrong the expressions of emotions and agony was the USP of the story rather than the characters and sadly Meri Bro didn't put more emphasis on that.

The language used was pretty good and the narration for may liking was too much fast paced, in an emotional story its all about playing with the heart and mind of the reader at the same time and this story didn't give me a second to feel any emotion . All in all a bit disappointed but still it should be read once just because of the good message the story has

[rehankhan143]

natak :-

well ye story kuch azeeb si lagi ..... or boring bhi lagi.... main isko kal padh rha tha lekin maja nhi aaya isliye adhura chhod diya tha aaj fir se poori story padhi lekin story padh ke aisa lga jaise kisi ne meri ragging kar di ho ....... mujhe samjah nhi aaya shankar last me hijda bna ya rani bna ....

ye kya likh diy bhai ..... aisa bhi kya plot soch liya ..... aapki writing skill acchi hain lekin is baar story flop ho gayi ..... mujhe ye story thodi bhi pasand nhi aayi...... bas aisa lag rha tha jaise jabardasti padhna pad rha tha ...... har naya paragraph dekh ke kehta :- abhi or bhi padni padegi kya .......

reham karo malik aise story likh ke tourcher na kiya karo...... last time sayad dk bhai story winer the ...... agar koi ye baat jan ke story padhe to sucide kar lega .... aapse aise story ki ummed nhi thi... expectations kafi high thi .....

well fir bhi for a unique plot and superb writing skill ..

isko rate karna bda mushkil hai ..

[k2soni]

Review for The Blue Lotus

A good read. Excellent narration as is the forte of the writer. It is very difficult to
write a suspense story in a word limit of 3500 words but this was done quite nicely.
The whole plot of the story was made to be very simple, thereby taking away the
charm of any suspense build up. Also there were some procedural flaws which have
already been discussed.

Overall a brave attempt. All the best.

[Drift_King21]

Review : Meri Apni Kahani-love Sex or Dhoka…….

Yet another story where writer tried to mix up too many things in the story. The story started off like it was going to be a love tale with doze of emotions. But as soon as the story went into the flashback it became an Erotica where i guess the erotica was almost forced in the narrative. I guess if the writer had stuck with the love quotient and tried to make it a more an emotional saga than it would have served the story much better. The erotica element wasn't convincing and confused me a lot more

The language was pretty good and also the narration as well. Best of Luck Bro

[k2soni]

Review for THAT WAS A PERFECT FUCK..!!

An out and out run of the mill erotic story.

All the best.

[k2soni]

Review for An ode to a special couple by an obsessed fan..

It appears that everything about the story is picture perfect except the start
and the end. No background and no reason for the actions and an abrupt end
take away the hard work put into writing this story.

All the best.

[k2soni]

Review of Phone Call - Ek Anoki Khani

A good romantic story with a new concept. Written in the conversational format,
it was nicely paced with good narration and simple language as it should be for
the format used, but thereby causing a flaw, i.e., lack of emotions.

Overall a nice concept and good read. All the best bro.

[k2soni]

Review for Exbii Saved

An out and out comedy which would surely have taken the cake but for the
excessive use of abuses. I had a good laugh reading it, which I am sure was
the sole aim and purpose of the writer.

All the best.

P.S: Full thread will be most welcome but with less abuses.