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Story by vijay2309
Achi story thi thoda suspence bhi create kiya par bich ma vijay naam ka insan ko kyo ghusaya uska naam kuch aur nahi rakh sakta tha confuss kara diya. Nice try. A small and sweet story. Par unka bich pyar toh dikhaya hi nahi sirf unki feeling batayi. Agar thoda pyar unka bich bhi dikha data toh acha rahta. I will give 3.5/5 |
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Review on Dil ka aalam main kya bataun tujhe
Ek pati ka apni patni ko pyaar bhara khat ![]() Pyaar ke kayi pehlu dikhaye aapne chote se khat mein. Pati patni ka pyaar, maa ki chinta, pita ki bebasi, behan ki utsukta Lekin aap ise aur behtar bana sakte the. Jeewan mein ghati choti moti takraar, nok jhok, ek dusre ko fir manana, bahut kuch ho sakta tha. Words bhi baaki the aapke paas. Koshish to ki aapne pat wo adhuri si lagi. Aap ise aur elaborate kar sakte the Anyway best of luck for the contest |
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Review on "My Story by Dahiya242"
Ek behtar plot p kam kiya hai, lekin kahani KO sahi tareeqe se pesh no kar paye, spell mistakes thein mager padhi jaskti hain , Suspens creat b kiya lekin ussy b adhora chora, Ek aur bat story KO past me likha Karo present me likhi kahani, kahani ni rehti, Likhty rehiye ga Q k kammi experience se hi pori hoti hai, Good luck for contest |
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Review on "आनंद पुलिया by vijay2309"
Pichli story koi khass ni thi, copy,paste to no haina? :P Lekin kiya hi com back kiya hai, Superb, lekin beech me jab vijay aya us se thoda pehli thori kahani choot'ti hai, jab ek banda yaqeen hi ni karta ek cheez p to achanak se kaise? Aur us romal k gyb na honey p q ussy.....? Kahani k beech me laga k he horror hogi lekin apne superb tareeky se kahani ka rukh palat diya, Aur last me to maza hi agaya, "Toh bhaiyo or unki bahno...ye kahni to ho gayi khatam...aanand puliya par kabhi aao to bhagwan ke liye rumaal kabhi mat bandhna....or haa aaj kal dhaage wahi mil jaate hai isliye pareshan hone ki jarurat nahi hai" Bilkul sahi kahan apne, "Love stories kabhi khtam nahi hoti....hamesha aage se aage badhti he rahti hai.....pyaar to wo cheej hai jo insaan ke marne ke baad bhi zinda rahti.... Good luck for the contest |
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Review on aaj rahab yehi aangan
Bhasha aur ucharan par aapki achi pakad hai. Bhavnayon ko bhi aapne bakhubi darshaya hai. Bechaini, besasi, sehanshakti, dard, ghrana aur ant mein pyaar sabhi ko aapne bakhubi apne kalambadh kiya hai Lekin mujhe aisa lag raha hai ki thoda over ho gaya melodrama. 14 din tak wo maarta peetta raha aur jin bahubali ne jabardasti shaadi karwayi thi unhone kuch nahin kiya? Jabki bhaujai ne maa baap ko ye baat bata di thi. Khair writer have the liberty. Train mein wo dhakka dekar maar nahin sakta tha but beech kisi station par utar kar use akela to chor hi sakta tha ![]() Apart from joke bahut behatarin story thi Best of luck for the contest |
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